While not a bad start you really need to have someone proofread and edit it . I found quite a few times the wording was out of order or things were misspelled or had the wrong word ( attitude where it should be aptitude when they were talking about magic for instance)
If she does it's not clear or obvious like it is with the mom. All we know about her is that she walked into oncoming traffic, if she has some importance outside of that it hasn't shown or hinted at yet.
Maybe! Would be interesting if she turned out to be or to have become a goddess as well. Poses a lot of questions too, one that makes me doubt it a bit though too.
We'll have to wait and see! Either way it will be interesting to find out more
Playing the new version,im confident in saying this could be another game in the high ranks,like:champion of the realms or hero's harem guild. Its just a matter of time....
very impressive! Don't get me wrong but the tipes of games, that picture the protagonist dying on the begining, and going into a goddess realm and bla bla bla, it gets really saturated, but what you did was really good. I'm looking forward for the rest of the game to be realeased!!!
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While not a bad start you really need to have someone proofread and edit it . I found quite a few times the wording was out of order or things were misspelled or had the wrong word ( attitude where it should be aptitude when they were talking about magic for instance)
I have to improve a lot in my English, thank you for this! it is very useful
Tons of potential, looking forward to following your progress
Anyone else suspect that the mystery girl who founded the village is MC's mom that also made a deal with one of the goddesses?
what about the girl he saved before death? has to have some importance right?
If she does it's not clear or obvious like it is with the mom. All we know about her is that she walked into oncoming traffic, if she has some importance outside of that it hasn't shown or hinted at yet.
me
I feel differently, like mcs mom is a goddess and the mystery girl.
It's weird both things were told to us pretty quickly with barely any nudging from us.
Maybe! Would be interesting if she turned out to be or to have become a goddess as well. Poses a lot of questions too, one that makes me doubt it a bit though too.
We'll have to wait and see! Either way it will be interesting to find out more
Playing the new version,im confident in saying this could be another game in the high ranks,like:champion of the realms or hero's harem guild. Its just a matter of time....
but im horny now
very impressive! Don't get me wrong but the tipes of games, that picture the protagonist dying on the begining, and going into a goddess realm and bla bla bla, it gets really saturated, but what you did was really good. I'm looking forward for the rest of the game to be realeased!!!
Thank you! my goal is to make an entertaining story so I really appreciate it!
It ain't much,but its honest work